So, I went into Stevenson Union today and there was a live band! Made me feel like rocking out :D
Right now I'm listening to Queen YEAH!
anywhose... so, I thought that we might have to read something in class today...But we didn't. So I decided that I would share it here; and ask for comments, I really want to flesh this out a little more.
I don't have a title for it yet.
I’ve lost them
these strangers.
One was odd to me;
the other,
I thought a hero.
They both vanished.
With one there was hope;
And with the other
nothing remains.
Oh how odd that he
was a hero.
i agree i think you should make it longer, i like the short lines though, I don't know if I would "flesH" them out, it seems like what you have here could be the beginning of a much longer somewhat-reflective piece.
ReplyDeleteHey thanks! :D
ReplyDeleteI like the short lines too...so making it longer is a great option.
Thank you for your input.